Reflect

Looking back on not only my own piece for this assessment but also the pieces written by my fellow classmates has been very informative. I have learnt some amazing things from the way that they had set out their own pieces. How they made things seem interesting or how they incorporated certain devices into their works. I, myself, felt that the next time I write something I will keep in mind what I found worked while now being more away of the things that did not work as well.

I tried to read my own piece with an analytical eye and I found that, while I feel that it started off strong, it seemed to have lost its point towards the end. Being the writer myself I know it is because I am the type of writer who likes to write long chapters or stories and this piece was intended to be a long story itself. Still, I feel that it should have had a bit more substance to keep the story going in the parts where it became drawn out. Either that or for it to stop properly, come to a better conclusion. It is shown, or at least inferred, that this piece is suppose to be about the destruction of a daughters naivety in how she sees the world. How, to help her daughter survive, a mother was willing to shed some harsh and ugly truths upon her daughter. However instead the chapter falls flat when the flashback hits and, though it gives a slight look into Mebuki, the mothers, own childhood, it doesn't actually get to the point of the story. Instead Mebuki ends up echoing her own mother in a context that is much more innocent then how it meant when those same words were spoken to her. While this is a device that I find interesting, it does noting to advance the plot in any direction by the end of the chapter. It was as if this chapter was merely a set up for a longer chapter that doesn't exist leaving you with all this information, conscious or subconscious, and no context to apply it to.

Overall though, I have learnt from this experience and, again, I hope to apply these things I learnt into the writing I do in the future.